Nim's Island is a story about Family consists of father and daughter. Living on the island In Singapore. she name's [Her name is] Nim. Her father is Scientist. She had friends of the animals on the island. Lion and sea gull bird and orchid. Her father went on a business trip by boat Middle of the ocean. Said to she i [He says to her] will come back on Thursday. Warned her of not having parties in his absence. But setting up a concert with her friends the animals
. Storm occurred to her father middle of the ocean. Then cut off contact with her.She was very scared him. She knew a man name is Alexandra Rover sent massage to Alex Rover to help, but she sent messages mistake to Writer name is Alexandra Rover. Alexandra asked her are you alone?
And She said yeas, and She was crying.Alexandra Was hesitant i go from San Francisco to help or not, In the end, I decided to go,And was very scared.
In the meantime, was Bird gull help her father. The visitors to the island but the girl managed to evict them. Everyone was in disbelief that there is a girl on the island, just one boy, Because he saw and spoke to her. After that The writer arrived to the island,The shock of the girl. Because it was believed the man and not woman. She is angry from the Alexandra and told her just go out island. The writer tried to assist them. Sat down with some, And ate dinner, was refusing to eat, Because eating was a group of worms. The next day she saw her father from afar middle of the ocean.She Was very happy,she is hug her father, And said to him, i was think you're dead. In the meantime, he saw the Alexandra, and asked His daughter who is she?
And told him the all story. And he love Alexandra And decided To marry her.
Teacher's Note: This is quite a lovely essay, thorough and complete. Let's focus on the P. 83 syntax and consistent time reference. As with the previous essays, I recommend present tense. Thanks for posting.
--mike
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